I really like the flow of this, I do think it moves a little too quickly. Something more needs to be happening for the transitions, to continue the poem like a sentence, maybe a dripping or a flow into another screen? Overall, really awesome and I can't wait to see the whole thing
the only thing i can think of would be maybe having the text that overlays the white background white with a lower opacity. the black seems a bit harsh for the background but that may work with your concept. the direction you are going in is intriguing and works well. i haven't seen your print piece but i'm sure they all fit together. another thing that i picked up on was that the spacing between your words in "an ink spot" seem a little more spaced out than the rest of the lines. can't wait to see the final video!
this is coming along real well man. i think that the transitions between type are clean and feel like the shape of type really reflects water. Plus the change from white to black is reallll nice.
I think your animation is very aesthetically pleasing. The sounds are timed well with the movements and it really enhances the viewing experience. I'm wondering if there might be a gap between your concept in the printed version and the digital version. That may not be a big issue, just something I noticed. Keeping in mind that this is just a rough and you may be adding more type later, the amount of words you're showing at a time stays at about 2-3, it would be nice for a break from that possibly showing more type on the screen at the same time. This would also give you a chance to have variety in duration before the next transition. Overall very nice and I love the moment when it changes to white on black, perfect words for that moment.
I really like the flow of this, I do think it moves a little too quickly. Something more needs to be happening for the transitions, to continue the poem like a sentence, maybe a dripping or a flow into another screen? Overall, really awesome and I can't wait to see the whole thing
ReplyDeletethe only thing i can think of would be maybe having the text that overlays the white background white with a lower opacity. the black seems a bit harsh for the background but that may work with your concept. the direction you are going in is intriguing and works well. i haven't seen your print piece but i'm sure they all fit together. another thing that i picked up on was that the spacing between your words in "an ink spot" seem a little more spaced out than the rest of the lines. can't wait to see the final video!
ReplyDeletethis is coming along real well man. i think that the transitions between type are clean and feel like the shape of type really reflects water. Plus the change from white to black is reallll nice.
ReplyDeleteI think your animation is very aesthetically pleasing. The sounds are timed well with the movements and it really enhances the viewing experience. I'm wondering if there might be a gap between your concept in the printed version and the digital version. That may not be a big issue, just something I noticed. Keeping in mind that this is just a rough and you may be adding more type later, the amount of words you're showing at a time stays at about 2-3, it would be nice for a break from that possibly showing more type on the screen at the same time. This would also give you a chance to have variety in duration before the next transition. Overall very nice and I love the moment when it changes to white on black, perfect words for that moment.
ReplyDeleteYour transitions from the motion of water is coming together really good, I also like that the only sound is the dripping noise. Good work!
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